15-09-2016/05:05 PM
(15-09-2016/04:57 PM)Seth Wrote: if thats yr 12 english i have a good chance of actually becoming a lawyer lmao
to improve it
a) increase the formality, such as You are offically, invited to the such and such
b) puntucate it, you are officially, invited to the formal! make it seem positive, like somewhere you actualyl would like to go.
c) Make it seem like a human is genuinely talking to you. Not a robot. I would personally, love to see you attend!
Good luck dude
Lmao nerd. Seth
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